I don't think the email worked. This is too weird! Try the first link again. I got the paper to come up there a minute ago. This is really disturbing. Anyway, I'll bring hardcopies of the paper so you can finally look at it. I'll see you Friday.
Overall, a good paper. There were a few format errors, but that could have happened because I'm using a mac and it's not uncommon for there to be small errors when transferring things from PC's to macs.
I think it's in the third paragraph where you put several quotes one right after the other, perhaps you could try and make this flow a little better or just discuss the quotes a little more.
I was taught, that when writing essays, never assume that your reader knows what you're talking about. For the most part you do pretty well with this, but I feel there's a couple of examples that you could expand on or describe in more detail.
Otherwise I think you made some good points and it was good paper.
i got the paper so the email did work
ReplyDeleteyeah, the email worked fine for me too
ReplyDeleteOverall, a good paper. There were a few format errors, but that could have happened because I'm using a mac and it's not uncommon for there to be small errors when transferring things from PC's to macs.
ReplyDeleteI think it's in the third paragraph where you put several quotes one right after the other, perhaps you could try and make this flow a little better or just discuss the quotes a little more.
I was taught, that when writing essays, never assume that your reader knows what you're talking about. For the most part you do pretty well with this, but I feel there's a couple of examples that you could expand on or describe in more detail.
Otherwise I think you made some good points and it was good paper.